Soup Making & editing

My inquiry is about giving the children the opportunity to learn to follow instructions when making/doing things.

We need to work on self corrections and editing.

We made soup to sell for our Trade and enterprise activity. As you can see the children participated well and enjoyed making and selling the soup. They still need lots of help with ideas and how to write down a story using correct punctuation and vocabulary even when it is something they have experienced themselves. The experience was worthwhile just as an experience but I would have liked to get even more from it. I still have to mark their work as they do it or have them send it to me to edit because I find that I can't access their work in their folders on the dashboard easily.

1. Example by Taraia

Four weeks ago we make soup with my group. I cut up the carrots and I put them in the pot. Soon it was cooking. It was nice and I cut up the pumpkin and I put it in the pot too. Next Vili got the leeks and cut them up for the soup. It smelt delicious and I wanted to eat some. When we finished cooking it, we let it cool and then we put it in the freezer.   Two weeks ago we sold the soup for 1$ a cup with a piece for  of a bread.  First the little people came and bought some soup. When the bell rang the other classes came and bought some soup.  Some people came and they got two cups of soup. We sold all the soup and it was fun.

This was edited before but we missed these.


Taraia 

Four weeks ago we made soup. My favourite vegetable is carrots. I scraped the carrots and then I scraped the parsnips and then I grated It. Then  I put it in the pot of soup and stirred it.  It smelt yummy and nice. Two weeks ago we sold soup to the school. We put the soup into four big pots. Some of the soup was chicken and some was beef. It smelled yummy. We sold chicken and beef soup and it was only 1$ for one cup and  two cups for 2$. Some kids and teachers came to buy some and then they said that it was good and yummy soup. When the soup was all gone we started to clean up and go to have our lunch.

 2. We wrote stories using the Three Little Pigs Story by changing the characters and some of the situations . An example of editing.

The Three Little Foxes

To be edited
Once there were three little foxes.They lived with their mother in a house near the river. One day their mother said, “ You are getting to older and big too.Their is no room of you guys in the house. You need to get your own house now.”  “But mum we will get chased off by a big bad dragon who will eat us.” Their mother said, “There are no such things as dragons.” They said, “Okay.”

Off they went down to the forest. The first fox met a bear selling lots of balloon and he bought the balloon to build the his own house same where else. The second foxes saw a wolf selling some stick and he bought the stick to build his own house.The third fox saw a kangaroo selling bricks and he bought the bricks. He build the house he got tired so he went to sleep by the bricks.

Once there were three little foxes.They lived with their mother in a house near the river. One day their mother said, “ Your are getting to older and big too.Their is no room for you guys to live in this house. You need to get your own house now. But mum we will get chased off by a big bad dragon who will eat us.Their mother said, “There are no such things as dragons.” They said, “Okay.”

Off they went down to the forest. The first fox met a bear selling lots of balloons and he bought the balloon to build the his own house.The second fox saw a wolf selling some sticks and he bought the sticks to build his own house.The third fox saw a kangaroo selling bricks and he bought the bricks. He built the house but he got tired so he went to sleep by the bricks.

After that the first fox saw a dragon and he screamed and he went inside the house and he stopped screaming. The dragon said, “Open the door now or I will burn your house down.”
“No,” said the fox. The dragon burnt the house down and the fox ran to the second fox who heard the first fox calling to him. “There is are dragon. We were right and mum is not right we are.”
“ Hurry come into the house,” said his brother.

The Dragon come flying to the house. He said, “Little fox little fox let me in.” “No said the fox you are a big bad dragon.” I will burn your house down.” And he did.

The two foxes ran to their brother’s brick house.

Lots of work on punctuation.  Basics still not done without help.
Reading what they have written and recognising errors to fix needs
lots of practice.   Have started to do dictation to try to help them to think about
spelling an punctuation.